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May 29^th, 2008 at 2:45am

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Me and my friend made this for school, i'm not sure if this goes here... Wink

www.chinesehobbies.weebly.com

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Reply #1 - Jun 12^th, 2008 at 5:48pm

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Could anyone please tell me how it is Cry

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Reply #2 - Jun 13^th, 2008 at 3:37am

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I especially like the big, bold, ERROR, the requested URL could not be retrieved. Grin

Might, want to check that out. Wink

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Reply #3 - Jun 14^th, 2008 at 2:05am

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I especially like the big, bold, ERROR, the requested URL could not be retrieved. Grin

Might, want to check that out. Wink

Works for me might want to try this : http://chinesehobbies.weebly.com
It's the redirected address Wink

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Reply #4 - Jun 15^th, 2008 at 7:22am

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Pretty good, I only had time for a look at the front page, but otherwise, fine.

I would recommend removing the THNX!!!!!! and typing Thanks! to make it a bit more professional. Wink

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Reply #5 - Jun 18^th, 2008 at 6:49am

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Pretty good, I only had time for a look at the front page, but otherwise, fine.

I would recommend removing the THNX!!!!!! and typing Thanks! to make it a bit more professional. Wink

Lol oliver put that in Roll Eyes

And i forgot the pass for weebly Grin

so i can't change it...yet Cheesy

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Reply #6 - Jul 4^th, 2008 at 9:11am

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Can more people please check my site out i spent hours on it ghetting and typing codes Sad

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Reply #7 - Jul 13^th, 2008 at 1:22am

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Looks great, nice clean layout! Works fine on OS X Safari!

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www.ehdtstudios.com

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Reply #8 - Aug 6^th, 2008 at 2:26am

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evanatorx wrote on Jul 13^th, 2008 at 1:22am:

Looks great, nice clean layout! Works fine on OS X Safari!

and it's funny you can't make the site with safari Grin

but on the front page of the site it has a screen shot of a site being edited with safari Grin

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Reply #9 - Aug 23^rd, 2008 at 9:30pm

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A pretty interesting site.

A few typos here and there (The bullet game on older games, 'ocollected' instead of 'collected'. What is the 'cor' bit, too?)

As for the blocking for hatemail... I hope that wouldn't be an IP ban, because that would be amazingly easy to get around Tongue

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Reply #10 - Sep 6^th, 2008 at 2:45am

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machineman9 wrote on Aug 23^rd, 2008 at 9:30pm:

A pretty interesting site.

A few typos here and there (The bullet game on older games, 'ocollected' instead of 'collected'. What is the 'cor' bit, too?)

As for the blocking for hatemail... I hope that wouldn't be an IP ban, because that would be amazingly easy to get around Tongue

no emailing ban so the can not email us Wink

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Reply #11 - Sep 6^th, 2008 at 4:29am

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Very interesting site. Nicely laid out but I agree with the other comments. I suggest you pay more attention to the spelling & grammar especially as this is a school project. Running a spell check might be useful but note that it will not pick up words used incorrectly or in the wrong context. You could do with a decent proof-reader to go through & correct what you already have.

Here's a few examples from a quick glance;
machineman9 wrote: Quote:

A few typos here and there (The bullet game on older games, 'ocollected' instead of 'collected'. What is the 'cor' bit, too?)

I assume this should be corps as in Army Corps. pass time in the same paragraph should be pastime.

Note that hobby (not hobbie) is the singular of hobbies. The word Chinese should start with a capital C.

Hope this is some help.

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Reply #12 - Sep 6^th, 2008 at 10:49am